Sample paper grading

Sample paper 1:
Criteria A- 3/5
Criteria B- 4/10
Criteria C- 1/5

Irrelevant first paragraph including historical information about Shakespeare and a thesis that does not focus on the student's own work. Second paragraph gives backstory of Richard III, but is poorly written with no structure. Instead of giving a setting for the quote, the author puts unnecessary information instead. Analyses eight quotes repetitively without giving information as to what they did on stage. The stage directions were nice, and the last few paragraphs were helpful to understand how the scene was blocked. The first 3 to 4 pages though, were distracting and poorly executed. This paper was written like a first draft, clearly showing that there was no editing involved. Too many spelling and grammatical errors took away from the paper, as well as how the author did not focus enough on his/her own character, and explained the whole group as well as their significances.

Sample paper 2:
Criteria A- 4/5
Criteria B- 8/10
Criteria C- 5/5

Throughout the paper the author is extremely focused on their own character, keeping their ideas on track. Gives background that is necessary for successful explanation of scene and acting choices. There were three different scenes performed that included three different clear focuses for the character. The difference between lit analysis and performance got a bit confusing towards the middle of the paper, since the author at first did lit analysis and then mixed the two sections together. There was an extremely large and tedious amount of deeply analyzing Ophelia's lines and reasonings behind them. The author's writing was clean and organized, without including any unnecessary information to distract from the criteria. There were many quotes, but they were justified and explained, which made them relevant. The conclusion could have been layer out more if the author had a larger word count, but overall everything was summed up nicely.